2018年管理类联考作文解析MBA MPA MEM笔试佳作欣赏 林晨陪你考研
<article class="syl-article-base tt-article-content syl-page-article syl-device-pc"><p style="text-align: justify"><strong>2018年管理类联考综合小作文解析 林晨陪你考研第一次MBA笔试 MPA笔试 MEM笔试佳作欣赏 林晨陪你考研</strong></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d98e189e2db54a148238e428cc035e28~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=Q8cBaQR1vCbHhSXf%2BZWwGbNvZug%3D" img_width="900" img_height="383" image_type="1" mime_type="image/jpeg" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d98e189e2db54a148238e428cc035e28" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;visibility: visible;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">2022年10月22日，林晨陪你考</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;visibility: visible;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">研笔试班的同学进行了2018年管理类联考真题模拟。在职考生很不容易，周六部分学员要加班，不加班的同学照顾家庭也有不少事，班班以为参加模考的同学不会太多。但是模考当天我却惊喜看到，为了不落下进度，大部分同学准时的参加了模拟，甚至有的同学早上5:30-8:30完成了综合考试，又赶在晚上8点-11点补完了英语的考试，有的则在周一和周二晚上分两次完成了考试，总之基本在周二晚我们已经收到了近百名同学的作文，真的大大超出了预期，不得不说我们的同学都有着超强的自制力和内驱力，真的太棒了。</span></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/2769437aabaf45d398440898dce4e088~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=xJN8yG99IT9WCW7x3IRMYZxviKw%3D" img_width="568" img_height="167" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/2769437aabaf45d398440898dce4e088" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p style="text-align: justify"><strong>第一次模拟考试，又遇到了武汉疫情，虽然线下模拟的人不多，但是大家都很认真哦~</strong></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d17d7396a6574a39a868589bfa5f96b8~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=vTIfAwIB%2B5wQs9HRSVGuKkaiGX0%3D" img_width="1080" img_height="810" image_type="1" mime_type="image/jpeg" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d17d7396a6574a39a868589bfa5f96b8" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/8950624b0fa642d8ab2975f5eb0943e2~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=G3UzVVLc23SiUvstuhY16X5E75U%3D" img_width="1080" img_height="810" image_type="1" mime_type="image/jpeg" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/8950624b0fa642d8ab2975f5eb0943e2" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">为了不辜负大家的努力，我们对每份作文进行了详尽且细致的批改，虽然</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">是第一次模拟，批改过程中我们还是看到不少同学的作文可以堪称为范文，当然也暴露了一些共性的问题。好的习作，我们已设为精选并置顶在学习打卡平台中，供大家参考学习，对于共性的问题也做了如下总结和梳理，帮助大家有效的改进和提高。</span><br></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">管理类联考有两篇</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">写作</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">分别是考卷的</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">第</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">56—57小题，</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">分值</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">共</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">65分。其中论证有效性分析30分，论说文35分</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">，</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">均需写在</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">答题卡指定位置的边框区域内。</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">今天我们重点分析一下小作文，论证有效分析。首先，我们对写作要求进行界定：</span></span></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/a7ff1b1d971a449ea395ec304a323627~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=F405bJmOQ%2Byuta5TKiy8Y1n8Ilw%3D" img_width="1080" img_height="610" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/a7ff1b1d971a449ea395ec304a323627" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"> </span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">我们要注意关键词“论证中存在的缺陷和漏洞”，就是说我们要找材料论证中的缺陷和漏洞，</span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">例如：概念混淆、推理过于绝对、非黑即白、以偏概全等</span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">。“选择若干点”一般文章有至少六处错误，而我们</span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">只需要找到四处，指出错误点并对其进行充分论证</span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">，就很好的完成了写作任务。“600字左右”，保险起见，</span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">我们要选择600+</span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">，</span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">620-630都是可以的，</span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">超过这个字数则大可不必，毕竟联考的时间很宝贵，但是少于600字是不可取的</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">。总结有效性分析写作框架为：标题、首段、四个论证段落、尾段。即</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">全文整体结构分6段，首段引题，尾</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">段</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">总结，中间</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">四个论证段落</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">指出</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">论证中四个存在缺陷并进行充分的</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">分析论证，文章</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">整体</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">在</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">630字</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">。</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">在这次批改中，共性错误如下：</span></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/c616660d46014cdc8629ee564b45780a~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=inFE8x7%2B0Wd2qa6OpruFAal5Sl4%3D" img_width="554" img_height="145" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/c616660d46014cdc8629ee564b45780a" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d0f80848ea9b4fda9154147a36813a8f~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=1deOMlRi14Fl4ScuJbMeLi9pXCE%3D" img_width="553" img_height="176" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d0f80848ea9b4fda9154147a36813a8f" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/988a517249d447ffb6e0552259ac84f9~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=96WY0kdT39VP4mtIjNBUebpIGeo%3D" img_width="556" img_height="168" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/988a517249d447ffb6e0552259ac84f9" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d83791012aa242febe14215cd02e1571~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=bFA%2FXdjR2uM9tLJstyOmi%2BhFDdM%3D" img_width="554" img_height="121" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/d83791012aa242febe14215cd02e1571" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p style="text-align: justify"><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">（</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">1）标题不合适或格式不对</span></span></strong></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">材料认为</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">哈佛大学教授本杰明</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">·史华慈</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">指出的</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">物质主义潮流将极大地冲</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">击人类社会固有的价值观念，造成人类精神世界的空虚，这一论点值得商榷</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">，</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">即作者的观点是：不认为物质主义会造成人类精神世界的空虚或认为物质主义不会造成人类精神世界的空虚。</span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">标题表达了我们对材料的理解程度，我们可以直接用</span></span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">“</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">物质主义未必不会</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">造成精神世界的空虚</span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">”</span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">表明我们的观点，也可以针对结论</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">用后吗式反问句作为标题</span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">“</span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">物质主义真的不会造成精神世界空虚吗？</span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">”</span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">不少同学用的万能标题“一段似是而非的论证”，万能标题虽然不出错但是也说明不了你对材料理解程度，因此除非万不得已，慎用万能标题。还有不少同学的标题为“物质主义是否会造成精神世界空虚？”“物质主义会造成精神世界的空虚吗？”注意反问句表达肯定的意思也表达了我们的观点，而疑问句是不置可否的意思，用反问句更为合适。</span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-size: 16px;font-family: 微软雅黑;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">标题尽量少于一行、居中，无需与正文间隔一段。</span></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/5116eae2ad724599bb743875823dbc73~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=%2FlWRChbLqmuw2HqVTEUoFEhtHf0%3D" img_width="554" img_height="112" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/5116eae2ad724599bb743875823dbc73" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p style="text-align: justify"><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">（</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">2</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">）</span></span></strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"> </span></span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">首尾段落过于冗长：尾段大篇幅总结、甚至给出改正建议。</span></span></strong></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">首段的目的是引题</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">+过渡，尾段作用是总结+扣题，</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">均</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">应在</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">3</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">行</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">6</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">0字以内。其余的篇幅和精力应留给</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">中间的四个</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">论证段落。</span></span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">建议首段：材料通过一系列的事例和论证得出</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">“************”的结论，然而，其论证过程存在诸多不当，现分析如下：</span></span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">建议尾段：综上所述，由于材料在论证中存在诸多缺陷因此</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">“********”的结论是难以成立的。</span></span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">总结出材料的结论是非常重要的，如果得出的结论是错误的，那么首尾段所论述的内容及题目肯定就跑偏了</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">，</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">这次用不少首尾段的问题是源于这个原因</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">。</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">有的同学写到最后发现字数不够，进行了大篇幅的总结，给出了改正建议</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">,也是错误的。</span></span></p><p class="pgc-img"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/8b7992291ec34d14bb7dcb44f1f48d3d~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=20IaOSPPAVoYvCd5mOX6SBHaJz0%3D" img_width="538" img_height="235" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/8b7992291ec34d14bb7dcb44f1f48d3d" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"></p><p class="pgc-img syl-line-pure-english"><img src="https://p3-sign.toutiaoimg.com/tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/1565369487224bf5a386cdd57c310471~noop.image?_iz=58558&from=article.pc_detail&x-expires=1668594293&x-signature=pH4qjFlWkYXHdvitupXol6CiHws%3D" img_width="564" img_height="218" image_type="1" mime_type="image/png" web_uri="tos-cn-i-qvj2lq49k0/1565369487224bf5a386cdd57c310471" class="syl-page-img" style="height: auto;"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);font-family: 微软雅黑;font-size: 16px;letter-spacing: 0;text-align: justify;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"> </span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">（</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">3</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">）</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">论证段结构不对：论证段落只有三段</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">；</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">论证段落长短不一，</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">结构</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">层次不齐、语言不够精炼，</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">或者逆向思维较难看的懂论证的逻辑</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">......</span></span></strong></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">本论要写四段，以</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">“首先、其次、再次和最后”，或者“第一、第二、第三和第四”作为段首。如果围绕三个缺陷就少了一段，那么论证段分数就少了四分之一</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">,即使总字数凑够了，也是要扣分的</span></span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">。</span></span></p><p style="text-align: justify"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">常见的错误，</span></span><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">顺序词混用</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">“</span></span></strong><strong><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;font-family: 微软雅黑;color: rgb(18, 18, 18);letter-spacing: 0;font-size: 16px;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important"><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">首先、其次、第三、最后</span><span style="outline: 0px;max-width: 100%;box-sizing: border-box !important;overflow-wrap: break-word !important">”</span></spa
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